Supplementary Information

March 3, 2008 at 10:32 am (Supplementary Material)

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Social Studies Preamble Draft

March 3, 2008 at 10:28 am (Social Studies -, Supplementary Material)

The government of Australia has invited admissions for the amendment of the preamble to the constitution to include indigenous Australians. The reason we believe to change this is because the preamble that is in the referendum does not or barley involves the indigenous Australians that were here thousands of years before the British or Europeans came to Australia and hold the history of Australia.  We should change the preamble to fit with there needs as well because of all the thing that we have done to them like “the stolen generations” when we took there children and raised them to make them one of there own. Also when we first came and we took there land and caused disease spread around Australia and kill thousands of Aboriginals.  We have been very disrespectful and mistreated them during the years until 2008 when we said sorry

First argument is the Stolen Generation which started around 1869 and ended 1963. They British stole the aboriginal children and raised them to make the one of there own and lose there aboriginal culture. Parents were not allowed to see there children because of fear from distracting the children and children were not allowed to speak aboriginal languages.  “They changed our names, they changed our religion, they changed our date of birth, they did all that. That’s why today, a lot of them don’t know who they are, where they’re from. We’ve got to watch today that brothers aren’t marrying sisters; because of the Government. Children were taken from interstate, and they were just put everywhere.” This was said by a child that wants to be confidential New South Wales.

Our second argument, the Aboriginals even thought they were the first people on Australia had to wait many years after the colonization to be counted and called and Australian citizen. There was a twist though in the citizenship. If they changed to become an Australian citizen they could not call them selves Aboriginals any more. In 1959 Aboriginals were given the same Commonwealth pension benefits such as unemployment benefits, just like Australians citizens had. Also in 1962 the aboriginals also had the right to vote in parliament elections, before only Aboriginals that were educated and civilized had the right to vote. In 1967 the people of Australia had the vote of deciding if the aboriginals should be counted in the census and let the Commonwealth help them where ever they lived. They now call it the 1967 referendum.

A speech that changed every thing happened on the 13th of February, 2008. Prime Minister Kevin Rudd said sorry to the stolen generations a part of his speech says For the pain, suffering and hurt of these Stolen Generations, their descendants and for their families left behind, we say sorry. To the mothers and the fathers, the brothers and the sisters, for the breaking up of families and communities, we say sorry. And for the indignity and degradation thus inflicted on a proud people and a proud culture, we say sorry.”  This apology was taken by all aboriginals a new beginning and forgetting the past and the stolen generation.  The government then agreed to pay and help build Aborigines houses and help Aboriginal children go to school.  This speech was watched in schools and was heard by thousands even though the speech was a three hundred and sixty one words it still isn’t enough because it dosent change there lives.  We need to do something more Also there are famous activist that work and fought for change. One of them is Pearl Gibbs. She was a public speaker and had powerful partnerships with aboriginals and she had protests.  It started when she was sixteen years of age and she was working as a cook, there she met many Aboriginal girls. As he worked she realized that the Aboriginal girls were being denied there basic rights and benefits because of racial discrimination, from then on she decided to try and stop and end the racial discrimination of young Aboriginal women.  She organized strikes, boycotts and protests. Another  activist for Aborigines was Sir Douglas Nicholas who was born in 1906, he worked on improving the relationship between police and Aboriginals and in 1967 he became Australia’s first Aboriginal Governor.  He died in 1988, aged 82. These are the people that should be following and trying to be like because then no one would get hurt and the Aboriginals problem would of ended ages ago and might have avoided many things that happened and hurt the Aboriginals.When the first fleet came the Aborigines were abused and there land was taken from them. They were also infected with new diseases that wiped out thousands of Aborigines and the half Aboriginals were born yet they were taken as British.  The Aboriginals health is still bad due to the over drinking of alcohol and in the recent tests for aboriginals health diabetes kills eighteen percent of the population, twenty four percent is from suicide, seventeen percent is from abuse, sixteen percent of is from external damages and diseases like hepatitis B and C. Yet the government does not help until recently when they realized it was becoming really bad in some areas. Still though the diseases are still a big thing in Aboriginals.

Theses are our arguments to why aboriginals should be cared about and be treated exactly like us. In 2008 they forgave us for saying sorry but they are still in the same trouble as they were before and we have taken over what was there’s and called it our own.  We not only need to say sorry but help them and be kind to them and treat them as we were acting to a follow Australian.  This is our point of veiw and hope fully Aborginals will be accepted in to Australia as normal people and be respected

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Aboriginal Poem Analysis – The Aboriginal Cricketer

February 28, 2008 at 8:43 pm (Supplementary Material)

 Les Murray

Mid-9th century

Good-looking young man

in your Crimean shirt

with your willow shield
up, as if to face spears,

you’re inside their men’s Law,

one church they do obey;

they’ll remember you were here.
Keep fending off their casts.

Don’t come out of character.

Like you they suspect

idiosyncrasy of witchcraft.

Above all, don’t get out

too easily, and have to leave here

where all missiles are just leather
and come from one direction.

Keep it noble. Keep it light.

This is an aboriginal poem that talks an aboriginal cricketer. Literally this is talking about a batsman who faces a cricket ball. Metaphorically this poem talks about how we should face our fears. It also tells us to face them with confidence.

In the last sentence, the author tells us to ‘keep it noble. Keep it Light’ I think this means that we should keep it simple and confront them one at a time.

This poem is structured with four paragraphs, four lines on each. There is no rhyming scheme and the author has chosen to use short sentences to let us focus on the main point.

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Journal 7

February 28, 2008 at 1:43 pm (Social Studies -)

The beatitudes are a guidline to teach you how to live your life. It is also wirtten in the scriptures.

The beatitudes give us a bigger understanding of how we should live. Its purpose also gives us a guideline to the rewards we may get if we follow them correctly.

‘Blessed are they who hunger and thirst for righteousness’ was put into practice when Jesus gave 100 people fish and bread for food.

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Preamble Cover Letter

February 27, 2008 at 8:48 pm (Social Studies -, Supplementary Material)

Preamble Cover Letter

2 Darcy Road, Westmead

Sydney, New South Wales

2145

 

Parliament House
Canberra
ACT 2600
Australia

25/2/08

RE: Austender Preamble

Dear Senator,

 

We are a group from Parramatta Marist High School and have chosen to write a preamble about the admissions for the amendment of the preamble to the constitution to include indigenous Australians. Our names are Scott Chau, Jonathan Saad, James Harb, Mitch Burt and Jamie Twal. We believe that a preamble is necessary so that we may fill the needs of Australian aboriginals and make an official apology to them.

This document contains reasons and evidence to show how the Aboriginals were treated unfairly and why we believe that a change needs to be made. Many people are still affected by the Stolen Generation and find it hard to reconcile and forgive. Discrimination is still a big factor in todays society. Not only indigenous people but those from all culture have faced racial problems. This has caused the steep deficiency of the health of Aboriginals. Diabetes, hepatitis and alcohol are only a few of the problems that aboriginals become vulnerable to in their daily lives.

In conclusion, we think that not enough has been done. By simply apologizing we are not doing enough. We, students of Parramatta Marist believe that Aboriginals should be treated equally among us. We wish that one day, all aboriginals will be treated fairly and recognition among today’s society. Forgiveness and reconciliation is hard but we can only change that if we show the initiative to do so first.

 

 Yours Sincerely,

Year 9 of Parramatta Marist High.

Scott Chau, Jonathan Saad, Mitch Burt, James Harb and Jamie Twal.

 

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Journal 11

February 18, 2008 at 2:55 pm (Social Studies -)

Journal 11:

an exposition is an argument that states a person’s point of view.

a thesis point is a statement used used to state the writer’s view.

expositions should be structureed with the following:

  • introduction
  • statements and arguments
  • conclusion

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Journal 10

February 18, 2008 at 10:20 am (Social Studies -)

Journal 10: 

I am quite satisfied with the work in our groups so far. We are slowly finishing the allocated work and progressing through our research. I feel that two people in our group have not contributed to the group and are working on the allocated work three weeks ago. This can cause some trouble if we don’t finish on time.

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Journal 9

February 18, 2008 at 10:17 am (Social Studies -)

Journal 9:

Today, a significant moment in indigenous history occured when Kevin Rudd apologized to the Stolen Generation. He said sorry to the aboriginals and asked for forgiveness. This can be used as supplementary material because it strongly relates to the aboriginals and gives us a stronger understanding of them. My aim for this lesson is to learn about the Stolen Generation and the history of the Abooriginals.

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Journal 8

February 18, 2008 at 10:17 am (Social Studies -)

Journal 8:

In my exposition,  i am respondible for the preamble’s cover letter and will assist jonathen in wirting the preamble. I am using youtube videos referenced about aboriginal culture. I will also give links to sites about the stolen generation.

I feel that members in our group aren’t working. Some are getting distracted quickly. This is probably due to the lack of interest they have within the group. As the liaison officer, i feel that i need to try and get members of the group motivated. If we do not fix theres problems we may fail to complete our project before the due date.

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Journal 7

February 18, 2008 at 10:16 am (Social Studies -)

An exposition is a one sided argument that shows a person’s opinions. It is usually written on a specific subject.

A thesis point is the point in the exposition that says the main argument. It is usually expanded on and forms the main argument in the exposition.

an exposition text type is structured in the following:  a starting orientation followed by series of arguments and finishes with a conclusion displaying the author’s view.

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